What worked well:
*Some beautiful shot compositions - well done
* Nice use of voice over to help aid the narrative
*The CU of the tear on her cheek is lovely!
* Lovely ending - I want to see the rest of the film!
Even Better If:
*Add institutional logos
*Watch the jump cuts of the girl running at the beginning - it is too jumpy!
* Show that he is a police officer, even have a police file at the beginning with her photo and name in it
*Camera is wobbly from the step up to follow Dan running across the field
*Consider adding in non diegetic sound - see if it helps add impact
*Add titles - remember the correct order too!
Kieran
Belshaw
Harvey AndrewJoseph Moss
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